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Re: Love

Postby Magyk on Fri Jun 12, 2009 6:35 pm

*Cough*

Attention everyone; It's the internet, and everyone is entitled to an opinion.

Chill the fuck out.
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Re: Love

Postby Turky on Fri Jun 12, 2009 6:49 pm

Duo wrote:
Helaku wrote:Learn to do a better poem analysis if u charish poetry so much.

Suck my balls. I was only scratching the surface


strong homo.

and duo, do tell me... do you seriously think Yoda would have had the mental capacity to decipher my classbind system in a matter of a couple hours or less? really? if so, damn, he must have changed somehow.
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Re: Love

Postby Beeper!!! on Sat Jun 13, 2009 1:11 am

Helaku wrote:wafflz,pls 2 suck a big fat dick for me,pls.You shouldn't even visit "fine arts" section.Finest thing you achieved in life was probably that a girl missed you by a 100 yard range.GG,jka-addict. :D :P :mrgreen:
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BEST POEM EVER!!!!! :mrgreen: GFIVE RIMBAUD A RUNZ 4 Teh Monie$$$ :lol:

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Re: Love

Postby Awrc on Sat Jun 13, 2009 2:17 am

Well Played@Wafflz

And as for my personal thoughts on this poem?
As English isn't your native tongue, I give you some credit.
However, this was awful. There is no excuse for this.
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Re: Love

Postby Helaku on Sun Jun 14, 2009 4:44 am

Once I get my hands on an Internet and electric-powered PC ill write the analysis the way NORMAL ppl understand,not vitamin vg(vid games) addicts.Cant b bothered 2 waste cell credits 4 the mentally left-out(ex.Wafflz)
gg,wafflz :P :lol: :D :mrgreen:
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Re: Love

Postby Helaku on Mon Jun 15, 2009 8:28 am

alright,boy,u gonna get it now...

Love inspires love can be a great source of inspiration
puts my heart on multiple fires when in love,guys say(dunno about others,but in Serbia) a girl set their heart on fire.im just trying how this effect is much stronger in my case.
and like unflattable tires (sth that cant be broken,destroyed,sth thats everlasting,even if imaginary,like here)
she binds me to her w/o wires I cant think of many things besides her.She binds me to her,meaning,I think of her a LOT,pal.a LOT!

love is great no secret meaning
like our date our dates,rly r magical :D
im telling u m8 I pretend to be singing this to som1,not to HER.
all along she was the bait like a fisherman,she was the bait i was supposed to bite(im a "fish") just to find out how great can my life b with her. ........

love is power love is powerful.HEUREKA! :P :D
like a tower this would prolly make much more sence If I had put it as the last verse,not as 2nd.
but it doesnt corrupt power corrupts ppl.love doesnt.
makes our best selves errupt it extracts the very best from us
helps us stand still keeps us in a both mental and physical shape.
on all life downs stay chill Almost nothing can get u depressed and "down"
and u dont need a pill Some ppl consume anti-depressives.....I dont.

love is like ice It sometimes really is.
slippery as gambling dice if u cheat in gambling games,ur dice are "washed" so they r slippery.not more than ice,but its just a comparison,and it fell in together great,becuz they make a rhyme also.
nutritious as rice East Asian people eat rice instead of bread.iTs just as nutritious as bread.Comparing rice nutritiousness to the soul-feeding effect that love has.
so sweet,so nice... (before "so sweet,so nice... add "love is" if u didnt understand)

Tell me sweet lies tell me sweet lies,it turns me on :P
bind me to urself w/o ties Make me think of u every day.(Shes alrdy done that :D)
and when I kiss your lips no secret meaning.
let ur toungue rips no secret meaning.
while holding your hips no secret meaning.
hold me tight,that it grips hug me with such a grip,that it starts to hurt.
u'll witness magical trips... and I will make ur deepest and most beautiful fantasies come true.

Tell me what you didnt understand.I hope I made everything clear now.
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Re: Love

Postby Magyk on Mon Jun 15, 2009 9:56 am

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Just saying...
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Re: Love

Postby tens0r on Mon Jun 15, 2009 10:40 am

Magyk wrote:Image



Just saying...

I hope you have a retarded kid.
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Re: Love

Postby dadeus on Mon Jun 15, 2009 11:18 am

love is like ice
slippery as gambling dice
nutritious as rice
so sweet,so nice...

okay poetry is my thing. I don't knoiw what kinda of rice u eat but it aint sweet and its a starch aka sugar not nutritous, The previous comments about dice were also coreect..

there is much more to be said. But I won't. just that if you don't want critiqued don't put it out there.


Now let me try....

Love in thirty seconds.

Love,

Complicated,
Overrated, Underated,
Commitment, Communication, Commecialised
Emotional, Physical, Mental, Relational
Agape, Eros, Philia, Storge' , Thelema
Heart, Mind, Soul, Body, Spirit, persona
Complicated, Totallity, Complex, Confusion, Simplified, Focused, Blind


Well that is all I can do in thirty seconds
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Re: Love

Postby Magyk on Mon Jun 15, 2009 1:06 pm

...Can you really write a poem with just adjectives?


Pie,
Delicious, Warm
Crusty, Sweet, Tasty
Golden, Toasted, Bitter, Scrumptious,
Lemon, Apple, Blueberry, Raspberry, Strawberry,
I love me some pie.
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